Thursday, 4 April 2019

ANZAC poem




I have been waiting for a long time for someone to shoot my hat on the other side,
so when they shoot my hat we can shoot them with our guns,
my shoes are getting muddy,
we need to fight,
we need to rest and we all hope we survive and came back to our family safely.

When we die we lie in the ground and above us there are a field of poppies,
remember us, remember us at flanders fields, if we don`t get rest we get weak and some might die,
Remember us, remember us, remember us, remember us.




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  1. Anonymous12 April 2019 at 10:03

    Hi Bella I am Zoe from Awahono School. I like how you have put a good size of your photo so that you can see it. Maybe next time you could make the words a bit bigger so I can read your writing better.

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  2. Mrs Bailey23 April 2019 at 20:00

    Hi Bella, as we come up to ANZAC day this week I thought it is a good time to come back to review the poem you wrote. I really love the ending 'Remember me, remember me, remember me' it really makes me think we just need to remember what these brave men did for our freedom.

    Thank you for sharing this with us.

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  3. Anonymous30 April 2019 at 11:04

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  4. Anonymous30 April 2019 at 11:15

    hi Bella my name is Tane i really liked your poem it was very good how you put it into paragraphs but maybe you could put more detail next time very good job Bella

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  5. Anonymous30 April 2019 at 11:25

    hi Bella my name is wati i liked how you wont to be a cop and i liked how you did paragraphs very good

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  6. Anonymous30 April 2019 at 11:39

    Hi bella like your poem about your self.

    From Te Ana

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  7. Anonymous30 April 2019 at 11:57

    hi bella my name is amotia i like anzc poem

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  8. Anonymous1 May 2019 at 11:52

    hi i am ben i like your poem it has good detail

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  9. Anonymous2 May 2019 at 11:28

    Hi balla i really like your poem about your self. keep the good work up.

    by manaia.

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  10. Mrs Armstrong3 May 2019 at 08:18

    Hi Bella, I really like your poem. I think it describes life in the trenches very well. I did find the text font you chose a bit hard to read, maybe next time you could choose a font that is a bit easier to read. Keep up the great work Bella!

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  11. Chido14 May 2019 at 10:10

    Hi Bella it me Chido this is so Amazing poem.

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  12. Anonymous13 June 2019 at 09:38

    ty xoxo

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  13. Anonymous12 September 2019 at 14:46

    Well done. This is very descriptive and fulfilling. Maybe next time, you can write it in a way it makes more sense. Well done, keep up the great work.

    By Zana

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